Trumpty Dumpty Promised a Wall

Hello,

Several months ago, I started writing a little satirical poem entitled Trumpty Dumpty, based on the children’s nursery rhyme Humpty Dumpty. It started out as just a joke among friends, but it has grown to the point where I think it might be able to help get this monstrosity voted out of office or at least give rational people a bit of a chuckle.

It still needs some work. Unfortunately, there is not much time left before the election that I hope will make it moot. My poetry skills are limited, so I’m having trouble finishing the additional verses that I think it needs. So I am looking for collaborators.

The latest draft along with some related information is stored on a Dropbox folder. I will post the link below. If you have poetry skills and think you might be interested in participating, please take a look and let me know.

As I explain in the information document, I plan to offer it for free. If there are any proceeds, I will donate them to the hosting platform or a worthy charity.

Here’s the full Dropbox link.

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/g5vi4l0uq9zd6f3/AAChWciPnomdvP3chnMvm4iua?dl=0

And here is a shorter TinyURL version of the same thing.

https://tinyurl.com/yyfzlvyp

Please check it out and let me know if you are interested. I am open to any terms and conditions.

Sincerely,

Walt Kelly

I like it.

If you are asking for edits, the only thing I saw that I would change, so far, is that instead of “Dr.” Frakenstein I would say “Doc” Frankenstein. The cadence is better with the single syllable of “Doc” as opposed to 2 syllables with “Dr.”.

If you want more verses. I will mull it over.

 

Here is a potential additional verse for you. I can come up with more if you want.

 

For immigrants fleeing murder and hate

The Dumpty arranged a most punitive fate

Abscond with their children, that’ll teach 'em to try

to seek legal asylum, instead of just die.

Now some of those children are psyhologically mamed

and some will not see their true parents again.

If you are asking for edits, the only thing I saw that I would change, so far, is that instead of “Dr.” Frakenstein I would say “Doc” Frankenstein. The cadence is better with the single syllable of “Doc” as opposed to 2 syllables with “Dr.”.
Very good, I've made that change
If you want more verses. I will mull it over.
Go for it
Here is a potential additional verse for you. I can come up with more if you want.
Good stuff. I made a few edits. Check it out and let me know if you see any improvements.

That de Adder cartoon is perfect. I wonder if he would be interested in doing some illustrations.

I don’t know de Adder, but that cartoon is infamous. He would be great for illustrations if he would do it.

If your plan is as you say, it seems a good cause to me. Edit as you will.

I don’t know de Adder, but that cartoon is infamous. He would be great for illustrations if he would do it.

If your plan is as you say, it seems a good cause to me. Edit as you will.


OK. If you come up with any more verses, please send them along.

Well, like you said, the t rumpty has left plenty of atrocities of incompetence and corruption and impulsive actions as material for plenty more verses.

Anyone else care to contribute a verse? How bout it Double H? CC? Lausten? Mriana? Widdershins? etc.?

(Note to Walt: ignore any by sree if he somehow happens to get a creative streak from somewhere)

Tim, so you’re a budding poet too.

That poem looks pretty good as is. {Also don’t forget the writer’s admonishment, for every word you can lose, you’ll gain a reader. I think it’s ready for prime time.}

Tempted I was to copy and paste,

but will leave it to Walt to spice up this space.


Me, I’m not so much of a poet anyways. :wink:

But there is SOOOO much material to work with. Check this addition out:


Trumpty Dumpty tells so many LIES

To believe him at all, is completely unwise.

He always lies about COVID and his promises that fail

He lies more than would Satan with a used car for sale.

And all his cult followers and his cabinet campaigners

Have become LIARS too, so we are all much less saner.

Thanks, Tim,

I’m working on a Covid section. I’ll try to work some of your stuff in.

I just uploaded a new draft with a section about immigrants.

Critique away!

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/g5vi4l0uq9zd6f3/AAChWciPnomdvP3chnMvm4iua?dl=0

Well carry on with your quest. I wish you the best. (Oh man, now I can’t stop rhyming.)

But seriously, I hope your creation can become viral by sometime in October.

Hey! maybe it can make a difference. I think that people who tend to think that the t rump is okay, are people who can believe things on the same developmental level as our young 'uns who relate to nursery rhymes. So maybe they can learn something from it.

I just posted another update. I managed to work in one of your lines. See clause 18.

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/g5vi4l0uq9zd6f3/AAChWciPnomdvP3chnMvm4iua?dl=0

Regarding tRump voters, I think Tom Friedman hit the nail on the head in this column:

https://www.nytimes.com/2020/09/08/opinion/biden-trump-humiliation.html

The Democrats can be arrogant, elitist, and out of touch. Some of them are as corrupt as any Republican. If they don’t get their act together, they can still screw up this election, just like they did the last one.

The Dems certainly have the reputation of being able to pull defeat from the jaws of victory.

So this time they should get all the help they can to save us from the way too powerful and corrupt tRumpty and from the dystopia that would follow his remaining in office. If that happens, our lives will not be a subject of Mother Goose but rather more like one of Grimm’s most evil fairy tales.

So thanks for you efforts. I ALSO really appreciate the help from the Lincoln Project type republicans and/or former republicans and independents.

Our future will be all of us together, one way or another, in chaos and conflict or in peace.

Either we will be in the Divided States of tRump, or we will remain the USA.